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breakingnews · 03-04-2005, 11:52 AM

Edit: Is this a letter or some sort of opinion bit? Too long for letter, too short for opinion, IMO.

It's a bit muddled at the top to try and close with a rather trite statement. Unless your copy somehow furthers the issue at hand, keep irrelevant information limited and focus directly on your point. Especially if it's going to newspapers/magazines - they'll scan for about 10 seconds (as I just did) and quickly decide whether to hit delete.

I would whittle down graf 2, and mash together 3, 4 and 5 and clarify. Drop the kicker - b/c it doesn't really kick.

Sorry, tough day at work here. When I'm in the editing mode, it sticks for a while.

03-04-2005, 11:52 AM	#3
breakingnews Q_Q Join Date: Oct 2003 Location: somewhere in between Posts: 995	Edit: Is this a letter or some sort of opinion bit? Too long for letter, too short for opinion, IMO. It's a bit muddled at the top to try and close with a rather trite statement. Unless your copy somehow furthers the issue at hand, keep irrelevant information limited and focus directly on your point. Especially if it's going to newspapers/magazines - they'll scan for about 10 seconds (as I just did) and quickly decide whether to hit delete. I would whittle down graf 2, and mash together 3, 4 and 5 and clarify. Drop the kicker - b/c it doesn't really kick. Sorry, tough day at work here. When I'm in the editing mode, it sticks for a while. __________________ Gone crazy, be back never. Last edited by breakingnews; 03-04-2005 at 11:54 AM.