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smellingdune · 03-30-2005, 01:56 AM

Quiet Night Thoughts
A pool moonlight on my bed this late hour,
Like a blanket of frost on the world.
I lift my eyes to a bright mountain moon,
Resigned,remembering my home,i bow.
Translated by Sam Hamill

Hello,everyone here. I am learning poetry translation and regard all of you as my mentor.:-)I wonder if we could change "a bright mountain moon" into "the bright mountain moon" and how much this change will affect the aura of the poem.
Thanks!

03-30-2005, 01:56 AM	#1
smellingdune Neophyte-in-training Join Date: Mar 2005 Posts: 3	About Quiet Night Thoughts Quiet Night Thoughts A pool moonlight on my bed this late hour, Like a blanket of frost on the world. I lift my eyes to a bright mountain moon, Resigned,remembering my home,i bow. Translated by Sam Hamill Hello,everyone here. I am learning poetry translation and regard all of you as my mentor.:-)I wonder if we could change "a bright mountain moon" into "the bright mountain moon" and how much this change will affect the aura of the poem. Thanks!