Thread: Original Haiku
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Old 09-12-2003, 07:56 PM   #4
Bitman
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Re: Original Haiku

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Originally posted by hot_pastrami
Those are the only restrictions
No, there're more restrictions. Each of the first two lines expresses an idea, and the third line relates them in an unexpected manner. Full sentences are discouraged, and ideas cannot span lines. Your second one is good due to the twist, but the 'and' makes a sentence, which is illegal.

geek pushing buttons
rhythmic words make little sense
just call it haiku

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fancy computer
can't pronounce ocean currents
the guy knows it all
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