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Old 03-12-2013, 11:40 AM   #4
Chocolatl
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Lovely, Dana. I like the rhythm of the "heel to toe" refrain. I kind of wish there was a new stanza, to go between the coal and the flurry, that had the refrain in it so that it'd appear in every other stanza instead of the 1st, 3rd, and 6th.

But that's just me and my need for symmetry.
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