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Old 09-19-2012, 01:35 PM   #1
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Halloween Song

I'm taking hell down with me,
Drink a pint of whisky,
Feeling kind of frisky,
My eyes are aw-full misty,
But I ain't scared to rack,
Satan in the balls,
This calls for toast,
So watch the devil roast,
Kingdom divided,
Against itself will fall,
And fall we will,
Nothing can stop the thrill,
Of these blue and,
Purple yellow pills,
Atleast I know I will,
Have done a good deed,
Planting the seeds,
OF anti evil weeds,
In my final breath,
I will have defeated death,
Maybe I end up in hell,
But it's better than being,
Under this spell,
So when the lighting thunders,
You don't have to wander,
Just know that this,
Blundering mess,
Was just a test to see if,
I could rise above the rest,
I was just tying to the best,
Job I knew how and apparently,
That wasn't enough,
So this is too tough,
and a little too rough,
But I've had enough,
OF the misscommunication,
My head is weary,
From all the inflation,
So say good bye to the devil,
Cause he's going down like a rock,
And hopefully now you will stop,
And in the end your love is on top.

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Old 09-19-2012, 06:31 PM   #2
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Disclaimer: I don't do drugs nor do I condone the use of them. This poem is strictly for entertainment but if it scares people enough to repent and frustrates the plans of evil doers and the devils dominion then let it be so.
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Old 09-19-2012, 07:59 PM   #3
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JBK, I think you're very talented. Thanks for posting this.
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Old 09-19-2012, 09:10 PM   #4
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Old 09-23-2012, 03:55 PM   #5
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Am I the only one that gets an Eminem/Slim Shady vibe from these?
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Old 09-23-2012, 04:15 PM   #6
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well this poem is a bit out of wack I admit... not one of my best works..
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Old 09-23-2012, 05:07 PM   #7
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I didn't see anything at all wrong with it JB.

It's just the way I read it/them, the timing/rhyming schemes make me hear Eminem rapping your work inside my head.
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Old 09-23-2012, 05:20 PM   #8
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do you like him..?? I don't like living in his shadow.. but I'm sure he's not as bad as I think he is...
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Old 09-24-2012, 05:35 AM   #9
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Eminem's a fucking genius. A true poet.

Grav was complimenting you.

And yes, at times, I can see what you mean Grav. Though I don't think this one is a particularly good example of it. There have been a couple though.
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Old 10-21-2012, 02:47 PM   #10
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Kingdom divided,
Against itself will fall,
And fall we will,
I got this from a bible quote about how demons don't cast out demons.. however the purpose I am using it for is the "great division" that the country is experiencing.. "If we don't start agreeing on the facts we will only find ourselves in a deficit of untruths".. This thing with John Edwards about how we are going to rebuild without Gods help.. I think it's called the Harbinger is totally FALSE. IF the country of the USA dose not REPENT and start putting first "The K.o.K." the this country will fall... forever... It's meant to scare you into facing the reality of the Justice of Christ... might not be the sanest idea but it's my honest opp'inion

"Father God in Heaven,
For you my Heart Sings,
Jesus Christ of Nazareth,
You are the King of Kings,..
Unified by Love,
And Flying your wings,

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Old 10-21-2012, 06:10 PM   #11
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I don't need no wings
Or things but i would like a heart that sings
I believe that power is within myself and
Not in some painted icon that sits on a shelf
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Old 10-22-2012, 07:30 AM   #12
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This is Halloween, this is Halloween
Pumpkins scream in the dead of night
This is Halloween, Everybody make a scene
Trick or treat 'til the neighbors gonna die of fright...
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