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10-01-2013, 05:10 PM
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We have to go back, Kate!
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Sugar devil Come to me, Tempt me with your artistry Whirls and swirls and chocolate curls This one just for the girls Sugar devil come to me Tempt me with your sophistry Light and slight And wrapper bright Won’t spoil your appetite
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10-01-2013, 05:16 PM
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hmmm. Am thinking that second verse should maybe say 'soothe me with your sophistry'.
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10-01-2013, 05:30 PM
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'soothe' has a certain poetic agreement.
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10-01-2013, 05:42 PM
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Consistency is the hobgoblin of ....
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10-01-2013, 06:03 PM
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We have to go back, Kate!
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Yeah, I see what you mean. But that line is paraphrasing an advertising slogan. "The sweet you can eat between meals without spoiling your appetite'. So that's the sophistry.
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