HAIKU - Page 4

Radar · 03-15-2004, 09:01 AM

I own all of you
because I'm the champion
of making Haiku

lumberjim · 03-15-2004, 09:51 AM

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Radar:

I own all of you
because I'm the champion
of making Haiku

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hot_pastrami:

Technically, a haiku's lines should all be stand-alone... a phrase should not span lines. I don't always follow the rules myself, however.

Improperly formatted Haiku.

the champion, huh?

would you mind sharing a real one with us, then?

SteveDallas · 03-15-2004, 10:06 AM

Boring silliness
The Internet wastes my time
I'll go read a book

staceyv · 03-15-2004, 02:55 PM

half cup chocolate
one and a half cups of cream
the mousse is so good

semisweet is best
heavy whipping cream's a must
first boil the cream

add the chocolate
melt the chocolate in cream
whip the mix up good

refrigerate it
now you are ready to eat
you will see heaven

Radar · 03-15-2004, 03:22 PM

Formatting Haiku
Is not very important
if it all adds up

The number of lines
is fairly irrelevant
and the poet's choice

But if you insist, I can format my poem, to make you happy.

Radar · 03-15-2004, 03:25 PM

Libertarian, defender of liberty, our last and best hope.

lumberjim · 03-17-2004, 12:29 AM

the night i noticed
as the river rolled by me
i was so happy

novice · 03-17-2004, 03:39 AM

I joined The Cellar,
Looking for enlightenment,
I got a T-Shirt

novice · 03-17-2004, 03:42 AM

Screeching, groaning, graunch.
Shuddering to a shaky halt,
My brakes need honing

novice · 03-17-2004, 03:54 AM

Greasy demeanour,
Poking in my cars privates,
"It's gonna cost ya"

Sigh. Resignation.
My baby monstered by this thug,
Go ahead, be gentle!

Belies appearance,
His surgery leaves no scars
She stops on a dime.

richlevy · 03-17-2004, 12:43 PM

Annoying these are.
Much like Yoda-speech they sound.
Talk normal, dammit!

lumberjim · 03-17-2004, 01:40 PM

:APPLAUSE: novice & rich.....good ones!

richlevy · 03-19-2004, 09:09 PM

I read these haikus
Their fine precision moves me
Such exact rhythm
So precise the syllables
So LumberJim, tanka you:p

Slartibartfast · 03-19-2004, 09:34 PM

Haiku Pikachu
I choose you to fight for me
Fast attack George Bush

Image of the Day
Cute animals on fridays
Pot luck otherwise

Google whale penis
The Cellar will be rank one
We stand by this cause

Haiku on diet
It has lost five syllables

03-15-2004, 09:01 AM	#46
Radar Constitutional Scholar Join Date: Dec 2002 Location: Ocala, FL Posts: 4,006	I own all of you because I'm the champion of making Haiku __________________ "I'm completely in favor of the separation of Church and State. My idea is that these two institutions screw us up enough on their own, so both of them together is certain death." - George Carlin Last edited by Radar; 03-15-2004 at 09:04 AM.

03-15-2004, 03:22 PM	#50
Radar Constitutional Scholar Join Date: Dec 2002 Location: Ocala, FL Posts: 4,006	Formatting Haiku Is not very important if it all adds up The number of lines is fairly irrelevant and the poet's choice But if you insist, I can format my poem, to make you happy. __________________ "I'm completely in favor of the separation of Church and State. My idea is that these two institutions screw us up enough on their own, so both of them together is certain death." - George Carlin

03-15-2004, 03:25 PM	#51
Radar Constitutional Scholar Join Date: Dec 2002 Location: Ocala, FL Posts: 4,006	Libertarian, defender of liberty, our last and best hope. __________________ "I'm completely in favor of the separation of Church and State. My idea is that these two institutions screw us up enough on their own, so both of them together is certain death." - George Carlin

03-17-2004, 12:29 AM	#52
lumberjim I can hear my ears Join Date: Oct 2003 Posts: 25,571	the night i noticed as the river rolled by me i was so happy __________________ This body holding me reminds me of my own mortality Embrace this moment, remember We are eternal, all this pain is an illusion ~MJKeenan

03-17-2004, 12:43 PM	#56
richlevy King Of Wishful Thinking Join Date: Jan 2001 Location: Philadelphia Suburbs Posts: 6,669	Annoying these are. Much like Yoda-speech they sound. Talk normal, dammit! __________________ Exercise your rights and remember your obligations - VOTE! I have always believed that hope is that stubborn thing inside us that insists, despite all the evidence to the contrary, that something better awaits us so long as we have the courage to keep reaching, to keep working, to keep fighting. -- Barack Hussein Obama

03-15-2004, 10:06 AM	#48
SteveDallas Your Bartender Join Date: Jan 2002 Location: Philly Burbs, PA Posts: 7,651	Boring silliness The Internet wastes my time I'll go read a book

03-15-2004, 02:55 PM	#49
staceyv Lecturer Join Date: Nov 2003 Location: Ohio Posts: 927	half cup chocolate one and a half cups of cream the mousse is so good semisweet is best heavy whipping cream's a must first boil the cream add the chocolate melt the chocolate in cream whip the mix up good refrigerate it now you are ready to eat you will see heaven

03-17-2004, 03:39 AM	#53
novice Ignorance is bliss and I'm orgasmic Join Date: Feb 2003 Location: perth, australia Posts: 296	I joined The Cellar, Looking for enlightenment, I got a T-Shirt

03-17-2004, 03:42 AM	#54
novice Ignorance is bliss and I'm orgasmic Join Date: Feb 2003 Location: perth, australia Posts: 296	Screeching, groaning, graunch. Shuddering to a shaky halt, My brakes need honing

03-17-2004, 03:54 AM	#55
novice Ignorance is bliss and I'm orgasmic Join Date: Feb 2003 Location: perth, australia Posts: 296	Greasy demeanour, Poking in my cars privates, "It's gonna cost ya" Sigh. Resignation. My baby monstered by this thug, Go ahead, be gentle! Belies appearance, His surgery leaves no scars She stops on a dime.

03-17-2004, 01:40 PM	#57
lumberjim I can hear my ears Join Date: Oct 2003 Posts: 25,571	:APPLAUSE: novice & rich.....good ones! __________________ This body holding me reminds me of my own mortality Embrace this moment, remember We are eternal, all this pain is an illusion ~MJKeenan

03-19-2004, 09:09 PM	#58
richlevy King Of Wishful Thinking Join Date: Jan 2001 Location: Philadelphia Suburbs Posts: 6,669	I read these haikus Their fine precision moves me Such exact rhythm So precise the syllables So LumberJim, tanka you:p __________________ Exercise your rights and remember your obligations - VOTE! I have always believed that hope is that stubborn thing inside us that insists, despite all the evidence to the contrary, that something better awaits us so long as we have the courage to keep reaching, to keep working, to keep fighting. -- Barack Hussein Obama

03-19-2004, 09:34 PM	#59
Slartibartfast \|-0-\| <-0-> \|-0-\| Join Date: Dec 2003 Location: New Jersey Posts: 516	Haiku Pikachu I choose you to fight for me Fast attack George Bush Image of the Day Cute animals on fridays Pot luck otherwise Google whale penis The Cellar will be rank one We stand by this cause Haiku on diet It has lost five syllables

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