feedback?

jaguar · 06-15-2004, 12:16 PM

I support this counts as an image, I started playing with illustrator a few days ago, how's this looking?

Happy Monkey · 06-15-2004, 12:25 PM

That's pretty cool. From imagination, or is there a model?

SteveDallas · 06-15-2004, 12:26 PM

I hate to be critical, but you forgot to add color.

breakingnews · 06-15-2004, 12:40 PM

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Originally posted by SteveDallas
I hate to be critical, but you forgot to add color.

Um, even in greyscale it looks fabulous.

I should take more time to learn Illustrator. If only I can get my two-month-old desktop to work again.

jaguar · 06-15-2004, 12:55 PM

half model/half imagination, I'll try colour sooner or later but I want to get a better grip on shading in b+w first.

Illustrator is great fun, while this is fairly 'straight' work, you can be really creative as well and turn out some pretty stunning effects.

smoothmoniker · 06-15-2004, 02:31 PM

i like it. It's got drama.

The hands are a bit man-ish

-sm

Clodfobble · 06-15-2004, 03:32 PM

The nose and chin area seem a bit disproportionate to me. But it's a beatiful style overall.

jaguar · 06-15-2004, 03:47 PM

The nose is looking a tad big, yea the hands look a little man-handish but getting them to work at all was work enough, they were mostly from scratch so I'll live with it

This is concept work of sorts for a project (which is also why there is the wierd tatoo-thing on her arm) and partly just learning how to use vectors with a modicum of skill.

warch · 06-15-2004, 03:57 PM

I dunno about the illustrator stuff at all....but if you was inking this thing... the shade/tint action around the eyes is a bit wierd- the lack of eyesockets. that effects the nose foreshortening too. you could also do with some subtle contouring/shading around the collar bone/ neck area. Good image though...

jaguar · 06-15-2004, 03:59 PM

I tried eye sockets, I found the effect too heavy but you're dead on, I need to do a more subtle job of it. Some more stuble shading in a few areas might help, I might go back and have some fun with the airbrush.

warch · 06-15-2004, 04:05 PM

Maybe a darkened upper lip, too? or varied contoured line between lips? Getting dimension with the stark graphics is very tricky. But fun to play with, eh?

jaguar · 06-15-2004, 04:08 PM

The line actually does have a fair bit of variety, a fair bit of detail is lost here, it works best at A4/300DPI or so but once again, you're right the top lip could do with some more shading, thanks! You're really useful.

jaguar · 06-15-2004, 04:29 PM

Better, worse? What needs adjusting.

elSicomoro · 06-15-2004, 04:33 PM

She needs bigger boobs.

warch · 06-15-2004, 04:46 PM

The under eye shadows bug me. maybe the shade the side of the face?, temples? neck looks better. the light source is a bit inconsistent from tank top to face and shoulders. (Right top in shadow) ...? Fiddle fiddle.

06-15-2004, 12:16 PM	#1
jaguar whig Join Date: Apr 2001 Posts: 5,075	feedback? I support this counts as an image, I started playing with illustrator a few days ago, how's this looking? Attached Images __________________ Good friends, good books and a sleepy conscience: this is the ideal life. - Twain

06-15-2004, 12:25 PM	#2
Happy Monkey I think this line's mostly filler. Join Date: Jan 2003 Location: DC Posts: 13,575	That's pretty cool. From imagination, or is there a model? __________________ _________________ \|...............\| We live in the nick of times. \| Len 17, Wid 3 \| \|_______________\| [pics]

06-15-2004, 12:55 PM	#5
jaguar whig Join Date: Apr 2001 Posts: 5,075	half model/half imagination, I'll try colour sooner or later but I want to get a better grip on shading in b+w first. Illustrator is great fun, while this is fairly 'straight' work, you can be really creative as well and turn out some pretty stunning effects. __________________ Good friends, good books and a sleepy conscience: this is the ideal life. - Twain

06-15-2004, 03:47 PM	#8
jaguar whig Join Date: Apr 2001 Posts: 5,075	The nose is looking a tad big, yea the hands look a little man-handish but getting them to work at all was work enough, they were mostly from scratch so I'll live with it This is concept work of sorts for a project (which is also why there is the wierd tatoo-thing on her arm) and partly just learning how to use vectors with a modicum of skill. __________________ Good friends, good books and a sleepy conscience: this is the ideal life. - Twain

06-15-2004, 03:59 PM	#10
jaguar whig Join Date: Apr 2001 Posts: 5,075	I tried eye sockets, I found the effect too heavy but you're dead on, I need to do a more subtle job of it. Some more stuble shading in a few areas might help, I might go back and have some fun with the airbrush. __________________ Good friends, good books and a sleepy conscience: this is the ideal life. - Twain

06-15-2004, 12:26 PM	#3
SteveDallas Your Bartender Join Date: Jan 2002 Location: Philly Burbs, PA Posts: 7,651	I hate to be critical, but you forgot to add color.

06-15-2004, 02:31 PM	#6
smoothmoniker to live and die in LA Join Date: Feb 2003 Location: Los Angeles Posts: 2,090	i like it. It's got drama. The hands are a bit man-ish -sm

06-15-2004, 03:32 PM	#7
Clodfobble UNDER CONDITIONAL MITIGATION Join Date: Mar 2004 Location: Austin, TX Posts: 20,012	The nose and chin area seem a bit disproportionate to me. But it's a beatiful style overall.

06-15-2004, 03:57 PM	#9
warch lurkin old school Join Date: Oct 2001 Location: Minnesota Posts: 2,796	I dunno about the illustrator stuff at all....but if you was inking this thing... the shade/tint action around the eyes is a bit wierd- the lack of eyesockets. that effects the nose foreshortening too. you could also do with some subtle contouring/shading around the collar bone/ neck area. Good image though...

06-15-2004, 04:05 PM	#11
warch lurkin old school Join Date: Oct 2001 Location: Minnesota Posts: 2,796	Maybe a darkened upper lip, too? or varied contoured line between lips? Getting dimension with the stark graphics is very tricky. But fun to play with, eh?

06-15-2004, 04:08 PM	#12
jaguar whig Join Date: Apr 2001 Posts: 5,075	The line actually does have a fair bit of variety, a fair bit of detail is lost here, it works best at A4/300DPI or so but once again, you're right the top lip could do with some more shading, thanks! You're really useful. __________________ Good friends, good books and a sleepy conscience: this is the ideal life. - Twain

06-15-2004, 04:29 PM	#13
jaguar whig Join Date: Apr 2001 Posts: 5,075	Better, worse? What needs adjusting. Attached Images __________________ Good friends, good books and a sleepy conscience: this is the ideal life. - Twain

06-15-2004, 04:33 PM	#14
elSicomoro Person who doesn't update the user title Join Date: Jan 2001 Posts: 12,486	She needs bigger boobs.

06-15-2004, 04:46 PM	#15
warch lurkin old school Join Date: Oct 2001 Location: Minnesota Posts: 2,796	The under eye shadows bug me. maybe the shade the side of the face?, temples? neck looks better. the light source is a bit inconsistent from tank top to face and shoulders. (Right top in shadow) ...? Fiddle fiddle.

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