Speak - Page 2

Perry Winkle · 11-14-2007, 02:45 AM

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Today is a first for TAS.

Today, a newspaper written by students, run by students, and most importantly overseen by students, begins its first run.

Today, the administration no longer controls our media. Today, we are exercising our rights, not as human beings, to a free and open press.

Today, we begin a new chapter for Taipei American School.

Speak is an independent newspaper founded, in protest, upon libertarian and free ideals to provide an alternative to the school-run media.

Speak is not an anarchist newspaper. Speak is not a punk propaganda magazine.

Speak is a free and open forum to which any Taipei American School student, teacher, or administrator may contribute. Speak is an internationally-aware, rational, mature libertarian newspaper meant to appeal to both student and faculty. Speak is an outlet meant to provide a way for students to express themselves through art, creative writing, political discourse, school-oriented journalism, and through graphic design.

Speak is not just a newspaper. Speak is a community. Anybody may submit, anybody may join the staff, anybody may give their two cents.

Speak is a newspaper for you.

Speak is, above all else, free. Speak is not my newspaper. Speak is your newspaper. It is our newspaper. Speak is for all of us to write and create for, and for all of us to read. And it is censored by nobody.

Do you smell that? That’s the smell of freedom.

Just a little editing. . . it could use more.

Ibby · 11-14-2007, 03:19 AM

what'd you change?

Perry Winkle · 11-14-2007, 08:02 AM

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Originally Posted by Ibram

what'd you change?

Some commas and a few small cuts.

Cicero · 11-16-2007, 11:21 AM

Comma and semi-colon. It's very important that your first line be powerful, and painstakingly correct.

It's been a long time since I have been an editor. So, I cannot be relied on. It is my first gut reaction, however. No hitches in the first line!!! It's a great opening if carried off properly.

Humble opinion from the peanut gallery.

I was fighting the impulse to edit it myself, so I only read the first line. Ibram, you are such a good kid, and I don't even think you know it.

monster · 11-16-2007, 12:32 PM

Good Luck. (and I agree with choco and clod about cutting the repetition there, but if you do keep it, basis is the word you need.)

Griff · 11-16-2007, 06:20 PM

Good luck fella! I'll post the poll.

11-14-2007, 03:19 AM	#17
Ibby erika Join Date: Apr 2006 Location: "the high up north" Posts: 6,127	what'd you change? __________________ not really back, you didn't see me, i was never here shhhhhh

11-16-2007, 11:21 AM	#19
Cicero Looking forward to open mic night. Join Date: Oct 2006 Location: New Mexico Posts: 5,148	Comma and semi-colon. It's very important that your first line be powerful, and painstakingly correct. It's been a long time since I have been an editor. So, I cannot be relied on. It is my first gut reaction, however. No hitches in the first line!!! It's a great opening if carried off properly. Humble opinion from the peanut gallery. I was fighting the impulse to edit it myself, so I only read the first line. Ibram, you are such a good kid, and I don't even think you know it. __________________ Show me a sane man, and I will cure him for you.- Carl Jung

11-16-2007, 12:32 PM	#20
monster I hear them call the tide Join Date: Dec 2005 Location: Perpetual Chaos Posts: 30,852	Good Luck. (and I agree with choco and clod about cutting the repetition there, but if you do keep it, basis is the word you need.) __________________ The most difficult thing is the decision to act, the rest is merely tenacity Amelia Earhart

11-16-2007, 06:20 PM	#21
Griff still says videotape Join Date: Feb 2001 Posts: 26,813	Good luck fella! I'll post the poll. __________________ If you would only recognize that life is hard, things would be so much easier for you. - Louis D. Brandeis

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