Romance Porn (NSFW)

anonymous · 06-02-2011, 07:40 PM

I found an interesting story that has an odd mix of extremely hardcore porn and romance. At 77 chapters, it's the equivalent of about a 400 page novel.

The sex depicted is very XXX. The writing is good, but the editing is terrible with typos, incorrect homonyms (their instead of there, etc) and in some cases cheesy porn cliches (how many different words are there for penis). Still, plot, character, and dialog are pretty good.

So, if we take into consideration that it is porn, which means based on some adolescent fantasy and may be some degree of misogynistic, can you grade the amount of romance in the story? Can it in any way be considered a romance novel? For comparison, consider mainstream 'bodice rippers', which some people would classify as depicting date rape.

Summary: Nice midwestern college guy with magic penis discovers ancient sex amulet, finds his soulmate and about a dozen other girls......

The Jilliad (you must be 18 or over to click this link)

The Story of Mark and Trish (SFW short companion piece)

TheMercenary · 06-02-2011, 08:32 PM

Nice.

Sundae · 06-03-2011, 06:33 AM

I will give it a go when I am in the right mood, and let you know.

I'm not a fan of mixing romance and sex - I prefer it to be one or the other.
I always filter out "romance" as a description when searching for slash. I prefer to click the box for "explicit sex"

I have a horrible feeling my internal grammar-Nazi will spoil it for me though.
My version of the Silent Singer.

richlevy · 06-03-2011, 08:41 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Sundae

My version of the Silent Singer.

Silent Singer?????

I'm a bit of a grammarian myself. I'll read some and we can compare notes.

Im stl amzd hw ppl cn fl in gaps in wrtng.

xoxoxoBruce · 06-04-2011, 01:31 AM

Haven't clicked the link yet, but find all those errors you mentioned, jarring, even in the trashiest trash.

richlevy · 06-04-2011, 08:38 PM

After reading (and re-reading) the first few chapters I can say three things.

1) It's a good story
2) It's pretty erotic, even if some of the sex acts are ones I would not ever consider.

3) It very badly needs editing. If I had a red pencil and printed out a copy, by the time I got finished it would look like one of those red checkered tablecloths you see in Italian restaurants.

Still, the plot is interesting enough to make it worth wading through the errors.

Sundae, we could make a game of it and see who spots more errors

. Bad writing doesn't count unless it violates composition rules.

On second thought, there really are so many that just keeping score would be exhausting. At the rate I found them, I'm guessing between 200-300 errors in 77 chapters. It's like there are two authors - one who comes up with a great story and the other one who makes 10th grade mistakes in spelling.

Trilby · 06-06-2011, 08:07 AM

Sanders college in Smithfield massachusetts.

snort.

Is some Smith girls foray into erotica. I give it a B for story and flunk her for grammar.

footfootfoot · 06-06-2011, 07:05 PM

Well as they say, "You can't get into Smith, but you can Mount Holyoke."

richlevy · 06-06-2011, 08:32 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Brianna

Sanders college in Smithfield massachusetts.

snort.

Is some Smith girls foray into erotica. I give it a B for story and flunk her for grammar.

Agreed. The composition sets my teeth on edge. Hmmm, considering how explicit the lesbian scenes are, you may be right.

06-02-2011, 07:40 PM	#1
anonymous Operations Operative Join Date: Feb 2004 Location: in hiding Posts: 578	Romance Porn (NSFW) I found an interesting story that has an odd mix of extremely hardcore porn and romance. At 77 chapters, it's the equivalent of about a 400 page novel. The sex depicted is very XXX. The writing is good, but the editing is terrible with typos, incorrect homonyms (their instead of there, etc) and in some cases cheesy porn cliches (how many different words are there for penis). Still, plot, character, and dialog are pretty good. So, if we take into consideration that it is porn, which means based on some adolescent fantasy and may be some degree of misogynistic, can you grade the amount of romance in the story? Can it in any way be considered a romance novel? For comparison, consider mainstream 'bodice rippers', which some people would classify as depicting date rape. Summary: Nice midwestern college guy with magic penis discovers ancient sex amulet, finds his soulmate and about a dozen other girls...... The Jilliad (you must be 18 or over to click this link) The Story of Mark and Trish (SFW short companion piece)

06-02-2011, 08:32 PM	#2
TheMercenary “Hypocrisy: prejudice with a halo” Join Date: Mar 2007 Location: Savannah, Georgia Posts: 21,393	Nice. __________________ Anyone but the this most fuked up President in History in 2012!

06-03-2011, 06:33 AM	#3
Sundae polaroid of perfection Join Date: Sep 2005 Location: West Yorkshire Posts: 24,185	I will give it a go when I am in the right mood, and let you know. I'm not a fan of mixing romance and sex - I prefer it to be one or the other. I always filter out "romance" as a description when searching for slash. I prefer to click the box for "explicit sex" I have a horrible feeling my internal grammar-Nazi will spoil it for me though. My version of the Silent Singer. __________________ Life's hard you know, so strike a pose on a Cadillac

06-04-2011, 01:31 AM	#5
xoxoxoBruce The future is unwritten Join Date: Oct 2002 Posts: 71,105	Haven't clicked the link yet, but find all those errors you mentioned, jarring, even in the trashiest trash. __________________ The descent of man ~ Nixon, Friedman, Reagan, Trump.

06-04-2011, 08:38 PM	#6
richlevy King Of Wishful Thinking Join Date: Jan 2001 Location: Philadelphia Suburbs Posts: 6,669	After reading (and re-reading) the first few chapters I can say three things. 1) It's a good story 2) It's pretty erotic, even if some of the sex acts are ones I would not ever consider. 3) It very badly needs editing. If I had a red pencil and printed out a copy, by the time I got finished it would look like one of those red checkered tablecloths you see in Italian restaurants. Still, the plot is interesting enough to make it worth wading through the errors. Sundae, we could make a game of it and see who spots more errors. Bad writing doesn't count unless it violates composition rules. On second thought, there really are so many that just keeping score would be exhausting. At the rate I found them, I'm guessing between 200-300 errors in 77 chapters. It's like there are two authors - one who comes up with a great story and the other one who makes 10th grade mistakes in spelling. __________________ Exercise your rights and remember your obligations - VOTE! I have always believed that hope is that stubborn thing inside us that insists, despite all the evidence to the contrary, that something better awaits us so long as we have the courage to keep reaching, to keep working, to keep fighting. -- Barack Hussein Obama

06-06-2011, 08:07 AM	#7
Trilby Slattern of the Swail Join Date: Jul 2004 Posts: 15,654	Sanders college in Smithfield massachusetts. snort. Is some Smith girls foray into erotica. I give it a B for story and flunk her for grammar. __________________ In Barrie's play and novel, the roles of fairies are brief: they are allies to the Lost Boys, the source of fairy dust and ...They are portrayed as dangerous, whimsical and extremely clever but quite hedonistic. "Shall I give you a kiss?" Peter asked and, jerking an acorn button off his coat, solemnly presented it to her. —James Barrie Wimminfolk they be tricksy. - ZenGum

06-06-2011, 07:05 PM	#8
footfootfoot To shreds, you say? Join Date: Aug 2004 Location: in the house and on the street-how many, many feet we meet! Posts: 18,449	Well as they say, "You can't get into Smith, but you can Mount Holyoke." __________________ The internet is a hateful stew of vomit you can never take completely seriously. - Her Fobs

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