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Old 12-03-2008, 04:52 AM   #1
DanaC
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Unfinished poem...

This has been bubbling away for a few days...not sure whether it's a poem or lyrics, really...

It feels to me like it needs a better, more conclusive ending, what do you guys think?


Days

Today is a good day,
I'm feeling light inside,
Albeit the sky is grey;
all I see are the linings,

of the clouds.

Take a snapshot;
take a sample of the road
I'm on.

Put them in a scrapbook;
glue them down in a hide-
bound book

Today is a good day,
I like the journey I’m on.
Albeit the road is long;
all I see are the flowers,

on the verge.

Hold the cold wind;
hold the crunch of the snow
underfoot.

Wrap them in plastic;
keep them safe in a pad-
locked box.

Today is a good day,
My mind is full of ideas,
Albeit the pressure's on;
all I feel is the rush,

of my dreams.
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