Haiku

ZenGum · 10-21-2007, 11:49 AM

How about a Haiku thread?

You know the rules:
five syllables
seven syllables
five syllables

I like them because they force you to compress your meaning into very few words.

I'll start:

Yoga-stretching clouds
Let shy stars play hide-and-seek
Summer city sleeps

BigV · 10-21-2007, 11:55 AM

But it's light outside
only one star shines above
wake up sleepyhead

Sundae · 10-21-2007, 11:58 AM

We did have a haiku thread - I loved it but it died a death
I'm happy to see a new one started

I seem to think in four and six syllable bursts, so I have to work at them
Just a quick attempt:

Gym again today
My October achievement
Toned but empty arms

BigV · 10-21-2007, 12:07 PM

Hugs are exercise
Strengthen your arms and your heart
No gym is required

BigV · 10-21-2007, 12:13 PM

Thinking, reflecting.
My past. My future. I have
only the present.

Sundae · 10-21-2007, 12:33 PM

My arms are open
Always there and never used
Like a dodo trap

BigV · 10-21-2007, 12:46 PM

Quit trapping dodos
No more passive gathering
Sundae Girl, Huntress

BigV · 10-21-2007, 12:53 PM

Brains, beauty, passion
courage, humor, loyalty
Sundae Girl, man bait

Sundae · 10-21-2007, 12:58 PM

Like the rising sun
Big V's generosity
Dispels my darkness

BigV · 10-21-2007, 01:05 PM

I don't make it up
(my words shine light on the truth)
I just report it.

BigV · 10-21-2007, 01:10 PM

procrastination
inertia and momentum
a deadly combo

BigV · 10-21-2007, 01:15 PM

Fear! What will happen?
The ostrich's plan is my plan.
Paralyzed by fear.

BigV · 10-21-2007, 01:33 PM

Domesticated.
Now all is new, having been
turned out by my pack.

monster · 10-21-2007, 08:18 PM

So, I looked up Haiku earlier this year (they weren't a part of my schooling), and I understood that as well as the syllable thing, they were supposed to contain two related but distinct images/ideas (sentences) and have a seasonal/nature link. Am I wrong in this?

The one I wrote was this:

Released from classrooms
New growth awaits the learners.
Scrip is awoken.

I was pushing the scrip fundraiser, which is mainly used to fund the firld trip program at our school. It was spring, the time when the program starts up again after a winter lull, and also the need for $$$

The haiku worked -after that I got requests for poetry in my weekly newsletter and the $$ raised nearly trebled!

I threaten them with horrible limericks if they don' raise more money!

Clodfobble · 10-21-2007, 09:04 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by BigV

Have one. Like a champ.
Non repairable. Flew it
Into the ground. Nice.

10-21-2007, 11:49 AM	#1
ZenGum Doctor Wtf Join Date: Oct 2007 Location: Badelaide, Baustralia Posts: 12,861	Haiku How about a Haiku thread? You know the rules: five syllables seven syllables five syllables I like them because they force you to compress your meaning into very few words. I'll start: Yoga-stretching clouds Let shy stars play hide-and-seek Summer city sleeps

10-21-2007, 11:55 AM	#2
BigV Goon Squad Leader Join Date: Nov 2004 Location: Seattle Posts: 27,063	But it's light outside only one star shines above wake up sleepyhead __________________ Be Just and Fear Not.

10-21-2007, 11:58 AM	#3
Sundae polaroid of perfection Join Date: Sep 2005 Location: West Yorkshire Posts: 24,185	We did have a haiku thread - I loved it but it died a death I'm happy to see a new one started I seem to think in four and six syllable bursts, so I have to work at them Just a quick attempt: Gym again today My October achievement Toned but empty arms __________________ Life's hard you know, so strike a pose on a Cadillac

10-21-2007, 12:07 PM	#4
BigV Goon Squad Leader Join Date: Nov 2004 Location: Seattle Posts: 27,063	Hugs are exercise Strengthen your arms and your heart No gym is required __________________ Be Just and Fear Not.

10-21-2007, 12:13 PM	#5
BigV Goon Squad Leader Join Date: Nov 2004 Location: Seattle Posts: 27,063	Thinking, reflecting. My past. My future. I have only the present. __________________ Be Just and Fear Not.

10-21-2007, 12:33 PM	#6
Sundae polaroid of perfection Join Date: Sep 2005 Location: West Yorkshire Posts: 24,185	My arms are open Always there and never used Like a dodo trap __________________ Life's hard you know, so strike a pose on a Cadillac

10-21-2007, 12:46 PM	#7
BigV Goon Squad Leader Join Date: Nov 2004 Location: Seattle Posts: 27,063	Quit trapping dodos No more passive gathering Sundae Girl, Huntress __________________ Be Just and Fear Not.

10-21-2007, 12:53 PM	#8
BigV Goon Squad Leader Join Date: Nov 2004 Location: Seattle Posts: 27,063	Brains, beauty, passion courage, humor, loyalty Sundae Girl, man bait __________________ Be Just and Fear Not.

10-21-2007, 12:58 PM	#9
Sundae polaroid of perfection Join Date: Sep 2005 Location: West Yorkshire Posts: 24,185	Like the rising sun Big V's generosity Dispels my darkness __________________ Life's hard you know, so strike a pose on a Cadillac

10-21-2007, 01:05 PM	#10
BigV Goon Squad Leader Join Date: Nov 2004 Location: Seattle Posts: 27,063	I don't make it up (my words shine light on the truth) I just report it. __________________ Be Just and Fear Not.

10-21-2007, 01:10 PM	#11
BigV Goon Squad Leader Join Date: Nov 2004 Location: Seattle Posts: 27,063	procrastination inertia and momentum a deadly combo __________________ Be Just and Fear Not.

10-21-2007, 01:15 PM	#12
BigV Goon Squad Leader Join Date: Nov 2004 Location: Seattle Posts: 27,063	Fear! What will happen? The ostrich's plan is my plan. Paralyzed by fear. __________________ Be Just and Fear Not.

10-21-2007, 01:33 PM	#13
BigV Goon Squad Leader Join Date: Nov 2004 Location: Seattle Posts: 27,063	Domesticated. Now all is new, having been turned out by my pack. __________________ Be Just and Fear Not.

10-21-2007, 08:18 PM	#14
monster I hear them call the tide Join Date: Dec 2005 Location: Perpetual Chaos Posts: 30,852	So, I looked up Haiku earlier this year (they weren't a part of my schooling), and I understood that as well as the syllable thing, they were supposed to contain two related but distinct images/ideas (sentences) and have a seasonal/nature link. Am I wrong in this? The one I wrote was this: Released from classrooms New growth awaits the learners. Scrip is awoken. I was pushing the scrip fundraiser, which is mainly used to fund the firld trip program at our school. It was spring, the time when the program starts up again after a winter lull, and also the need for $$$ The haiku worked -after that I got requests for poetry in my weekly newsletter and the $$ raised nearly trebled! I threaten them with horrible limericks if they don' raise more money! __________________ The most difficult thing is the decision to act, the rest is merely tenacity Amelia Earhart

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