Business as Usual

Clodfobble · 05-07-2016, 07:27 AM

Okay, but... Are there only 2129 farmers in Iowa? What is the significance of that number? If it's just the amount of farmers that the three CEO salaries combined happen to equal, then pick the highest salary of the three and tell us the farmers that one guy represents, it's more powerful. Or if the three are very similar, say "each" equals "more than" the farmers the poorest CEO gets. It's a good concept, it's just clunky. There's more power in fewer words.

05-07-2016, 07:27 AM	#11
Clodfobble UNDER CONDITIONAL MITIGATION Join Date: Mar 2004 Location: Austin, TX Posts: 20,012	Okay, but... Are there only 2129 farmers in Iowa? What is the significance of that number? If it's just the amount of farmers that the three CEO salaries combined happen to equal, then pick the highest salary of the three and tell us the farmers that one guy represents, it's more powerful. Or if the three are very similar, say "each" equals "more than" the farmers the poorest CEO gets. It's a good concept, it's just clunky. There's more power in fewer words. __________________ My book My other book My spirit animal

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